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Hold onto your hats and fasten your seatbelts for another gripping review from your beloved, faithful, and everlastingly snarky Bookie Monster!

Le Blurb:

When Bailey Adams left Logan Point two years ago for Mexico, she thought she was getting away from her problems. Running into her ex-fiancé Danny Maxwell was not part of the plan—neither was being chased through the city by the local drug cartel, the Calatrava. Now despite her best efforts, Danny is her only chance of escaping the people chasing her and getting back to Logan Point safely. Can Bailey find the strength to face what’s coming? And in the midst of the chaos, can she keep herself from falling in love with her rescuer all over again?

Le Review:

I was super interested to see how the author dramatized the subject of drugs and drug cartels. But it ended up feeling like a Hollywood movie. Of COURSE the mysterious, silent, enigmatic character no one knows anything about turns out to be the mastermind. I guessed that the minute said character walked on screen—er, page. (No spoilers – you’ll have to read for yourself to find out who it is.)

The characters felt flat. They all fit in their little boxes with sexist overtones that rubbed me the wrong way.

– Unbelievably gorgeous heroine who thinks she can take care of herself, but at the first sign of trouble completely understands that she just totally NEEDS a man to SAVE HER;

– Hot, formerly rejected hunky lover who remains faithful even while the stoopid wimminz run around like frantic chickens;

– “Angelic waif” trope (sadly, this is a real thing, which your favorite Monster may or may not have been guilty of in past writing projects);

– Parents who enter the scene just on cue to say perfect one-liners.

Joel’s character was the most compelling because he was the most human—neither entirely good nor entirely bad. He had something to lose, stakes in the drama, and things didn’t get wrapped up in a nice Hollywood bow for him like they did for the other characters. His personal journey rang truer than any of the others.

The writing was passive and clunky. Too heavy on the info-dump. The story itself was confusing. I kept having to flip back several pages and go “wait…what just happened and how does it relate to what’s happening now?” It felt like a first draft that needed to be tightened, tweaked, and polished. I’m a writer. The first rule of writing is: first drafts suck. That is why we do not publish first drafts.

Overall, the story’s concept was great. I really wanted to like it, but it didn’t grip me. 😦 I was super excited to read the story, and I thought it had great potential, even though it didn’t deliver in the end. I live just north of Mexico, and seeing the effects of the drug trade is a normal part of life. I enjoy seeing it depicted in stories.